August 1, 2013


Murder on the High Seas – page 1

August 1, 2013

Murder on the High Seas - page 1

Murder on the High Seas

The Next Big Thing

December 19, 2012

Last week I was tagged by Travis Richardson, (whose novella  Lost in Clover was recently published),  to participate in The Next Big Thing; where writers talk about their upcoming projects.

Without further adieu—

What is the working title of your book (or current project?)

The title has been recently changed to Detective Rules.  Throughout the book, the lead character, Guy Graff recites rules he learned while attending detective school.  Rules such as, Detective Rule #3:  You can lose a sock when doing laundry but don’t lose the guy stalking your client.  For most of this book’s incarnation it was called Shopping Can Be Deadly but I decided didn’t properly portray what the book is about.

Where did the idea come from for the book?

The book’s genesis started in a letter I was writing to girl I was dating at that time.  Yes, there was a time when people actually wrote letters.  That scene in the letter, where the woman enters Guy’s P.I. office and tells him why she wants to hire him is now gone.  But the character was created then and I felt secure in my writing style.  Detective Rules is my ode to all the detective/P.I. novels I’ve read growing up.

What genre does your book fall under?

It’s not a hard-boiled detective story and it’s not as light as a cozy so I call it something in between: soft-boiled or a mystery/comedy.  

Which actors would you choose to play your characters in a movie rendition? 

Guy Graff is twenty-six years old but he looks like he’s eighteen and gets called “kid” a lot.  Back in the day I would have said Michael J. Fox could play Guy Graff but today, somebody like Daniel Radcliff.  Kim, one of his clients and eventual love interest: Jennifer Lawrence or Amanda Seyfried.

What is the one-sentence synopsis of your book? 

It’s Guy Graff’s first ever P.I. case and his clients are being killed while they shop in Beverly Hills – and worst yet; before they pay him.

Will your book be self-published or represented by an agency? 

It’s always been my dream to go the traditional route; find an agent and have it published by a big publisher.  After this final polish that’s the direction I’ll be going.  However if I can’t find an agent or publisher I will definitely consider self-publishing.

How long did it take you to write the first draft of your screenplay?

 The first draft took around two years.  Much of that first draft was written during some UCLA workshops and writers’ groups.

What other books would you compare this story to within your genre?

 It’s similar in tone to Janet Evanovich’s Stephanie Plum series.  It’s also like Robert Crais’ Elvis Cole’s series if he went with more humor and less seriousness.

Who or what inspired you to write this book?

My love of mysteries instilled into me by my Mother.  I looked at the detective novel and said to myself, how would your write it with your voice and hence; Detective Rules.

What else about your book might pique the reader’s interest?

 I’ve mentioned it has humor but the story is also about finding friendship, trusting and pre-judging people and of course; the need to be paid your retainer upfront.

That’s all from me.  Next Wednesday Kwei Quartey – author of Wife of the Gods and Children of the Street will be answering questions about his Next Big Thing.


April 16, 2012

You have completed the script/novel checklist from Part One.  You have polished it more than your mother’s good silverware.  You are finally ready to let it go out into the world.


It is still not fit to send to agents, producers, managers, publishers, and studio people.

It’s not ready?  I’ve done all the work.  It’s a great story. The dialogue is crackling.  Why can’t I launch it into the world now?

So far only your eyes have been made contact with your novel/script.   You need another pair of eyes to read it. You want to send out your absolute best effort.  You don’t get a second chance.

  • Story points you think are clear are incomprehensive to another pair of eyes.
  • The great speech you wrote reads like a long boring lecture to another reader.
  • What you thought is a great twist ending is telegraphed on page twenty.
  • You used “your” when you meant “you’re” like fifty times.  You used the word “like” in an annoying way one thousand times.

Whom do you let read it?

  • Friends?  Only if you want them to say, “It’s great I can’t wait to see it up on the big screen.  Or, I don’t know what to wear to your first book signing.”   Hmm, no real feedback there.
  • Family?  Only if you want them to ask, “Is this what you’ve been working on instead of doing more important things around the house?”  Not much help there either.

Here’s whom you should let read it:

  • Your trusted fellow screenwriters or script/novel consultants.  They are familiar with the techniques of writing screenplays or novels; story, structure and format.  They know how to give proper criticism, “Here’s where it wasn’t working for meThe main character never changesThis should be an O.S. not a V.OThe second act drags.  What does your main character really want?

If you’re getting feedback from more than one source, look for consistent notes and criticisms.  They are most likely true.  Make those changes.  Read it again.  It’s ready for your final polish.  Read it again.

It’s ready to be sent out but I can’t let it go!

More excuses: “There’s just one more adjustment I need to make.  I don’t think my opening and closing images work.  The All Is Lost moment needs to be stronger.  I think it will be better if her best friend is French.”  

Question:  What is holding you back?  Answer: FEAR.   “What if no one likes it?”  “If I don’t get any positive responses I’ve been wasting my time.”

All writers have those fears.  You’ve done the work.  It is ready.  It is the best you could do.  It has your unique voice, originality and story. Yes, it’s finally time to send your precious baby off.  You’ve put all you could into bringing it up; nurturing it, letting it mature into a good honest full rounded script/novel.

YOU ARE FINISHED!  SEND IT OUT!……   And start the next project immediately. Good luck!

Any excuses you like to share?  Leave a comment below or email me at:

When do I know when I’m finished?

April 12, 2012

You’ve worked on your script/novel for months or even years with dozens of rewrites.  You’ve had all the time in the world to complete it.  You want this baby of yours to be perfect; rejection proof, before sending it out into the judgmental world of agents, managers, production companies, publishers.

So when do I know I’m truly finished ?

Have you completed this screenplay/manuscript checklist?

  • Did you read your script/novel straight through at one sitting?
  • Did you specifically look for emotional turning points, three act structure, and clear plot points.  Are they working?  Are they strong?  Contain big emotional moments?  Does the story slow down at any point?
  • Did your characters have arcs, uniqueness and consistency?
  • Did you read your dialogue out loud?  Is it on-the-nose dialogue or more complex by using subtext?  If it’s a script, have you had a reading of it with actors or friends?
  • Is your prose clear and clean and in tone with the story?  If it’s a script, are the action/description lines short but powerful and add great visuals?
  • Do your scenes or chapters flow?  Does each one move the story forward?  Can some be cut or combined?  Is there complexity to them?
  • If it’s a screenplay, can you make it more cinematic, or add set-up/payoffs or interesting transitions?
  • If you feel you’ve completed all the above steps, you’ve earned the right to put it in a drawer for a day or two.  After a short time away, re-read it again.  Still working for you?  Good.
  • Do your first polish draft.  Look at each word and each sentence. Are there misspellings or wrong punctuation? Did you vary your word choices? Have you replaced the “to be” verbs with more powerful action verbs?  Is the script/manuscript in the correct format?

After all that, if you feel like you want to tweak it more –   STOP!!!  DON’T MOVE!   TAKE YOUR HANDS AWAY FROM THE KEYBOARD!

Writers that still want to fiddle with it, tell me: “I think I’m almost there but I still have to find that perfect ending” OR “I just have to nail a killer opening and then I’m done” OR “If I just punch up my dialogue a little more, then it’s ready.”

You are afraid to finish.  You’ve worked on this dream project and now it will be judged.  It will be out of your hands and you are about to find out if someone else likes it.  You are staring in the face of rejection. That’s scary. But if you’ve followed the above checklist it is almost ready.

What do you mean, “almost”?  There’s more?  But I thought you said I was done.  

You are, almost.

Click on Part Two to see Part Two.

Part Two of WHEN DO I KNOW WHEN I’M FINISHED will delve into getting feedback and from whom before you finally send it out.


January 17, 2012


Try this: As an experiment, copy your script into a new document but cut off the first 5 or 10 or 20 pages.  Read your new 30 pages.  Does it start with your hero in action?  Is your script zipping along?  Were those first 20 pages mainly backstory?  Don’t worry, you can place any missing vital information later.  Don’t start explaining who this person is.  Set him in action then slowly reveal him.


FIRST TWO PAGES.  Man wakes up.  Man kisses his wife.  Man drives to work.  Man goes into an office building.  Man goes up elevator.  Man on rooftop takes out a rifle.  Man starts shooting.


FIRST PAGE:  Man opens a rooftop door.  Man goes to the ledge.  Man takes out a rifle.  Man starts shooting.

Which grips you?  Which one will keep the reader/producer/agent, who only read the first 20 pages, going?

It always goes back to: SHOW DON’T TELL.

Fall in love with writing, not with what you’ve written. ReWriteDr Tip:

November 30, 2011

In the November Mystery Writers of America newsletter, author Reed Farrel Coleman mentions several mantras writers can use when they get tense about ReWriting.  One especially resonated with me:

Fall in love with writing, not with what you’ve written.

Writing is about rewriting.  That’s the learning process.  That’s the time to take the script/manuscript apart, see what’s working and what’s not and then put it back together.  And then do it all over again and again.  Be willing to cut out sections that don’t work, whether it’s an entire act or one sentence.  Writers fear that if they make changes they won’t know any other way to make it better.  It’s the fear of the unknown which we all experience.  But I say you can make it better. I know this for a fact.  Even though at the time you don’t see how it could be different you can do it.  If you generated the first idea you can certainly create a superior idea.  Give it time but it’s there in your head, you just haven’t tapped into it yet.  That’s what your love affair with writing is all about: Being willing to give up what you have written but have faith you will find a better way to express it.    

It’s all about story, story, story… ReWriteDr tidbit.

November 11, 2011


My thoughts on Paranormal 3 –

I didn’t have any preconceived ideas about Paranormal 3 as I had not seen the first two.  Here’s what I think: Paranormal 3 is equivalent to paying money and entering a Fun House where ‘ghosts’ can pop out and scare you.  That’s all.  That’s fun and entertaining but in Paranormal 3 there is no story.   Yes, I experienced sympathy for the little girl who is taunted by the ghosts, but I always feel sorry for little girls when something bad happens to them. The story didn’t convince me to.  I watched the family move about the house doing their chores.  But I didn’t empathize with them.  I’m not bashing  Paranormal 3, audiences love these movies.  It’s an enjoyable scare.  They are what they are.  For some, that’s enough.  However when I sit in the dark, I want to be invested in a good story, feel for the characters, not wait for the next scary face to fill the screen.  Unlike the person next to me who jumped out of his seat sending popcorn flying.  Oh, free popcorn.  I guess there are some benefits.

Using “Beat” is boring. Give it a life.- ReWriteDr tip

September 2, 2011

A spec screenplay is a reader’s experience.   When you use the word, “beat” that experience becomes boring.  A “beat” is just a place holder when nothing happens.  Gee, that’s exciting to read.  Using a gesture or movement can actually add to your scene.  It can show character or tension.  For instance:

CARRIE: I don’t want to talk about this. (beat) I want to talk about us.

Examples of substituting “beat”.

CARRIE: I don’t want to talk about this. (smiles) I want to talk about us.

CARRIE: I don’t want to talk about this. (looks down) I want to talk about us.

CARRIE: I don’t want to talk about this. (slaps the table) I want to talk about us.

CARRIE: I don’t want to talk about this. (takes a deep breath) I want to talk about us.

Each substitution of “beat” added character or tension to the scene.

Should you never use “beat”?  95% of beats should be an action.

A “beat” shouldn’t be a pause in life; it should have a life in your script.

ReWriteDr Tip: YOUR TITLE PAGE – What should be on it and what shouldn’t be on it.

July 26, 2011

Your title page is your introduction to the reader.  What to make a good impression?  Format it correctly.

Do put on the title page

  • Title
  • written by
  • Your contact information.

That’s all!!!!


written by

Stephen W. Buehler

(In the lower left or right hand corner, email address, street address and phone number)

  • 4804 Laurel Canyon Blvd. #506
  • Valley Village,CA91607
  • 818-510-1716

If you wrote the screenplay with someone else you use the “&” sign. – You’re a writing team.

written by

Stephen W. Buehler & Albert Einstein

The “and” is used when the first writer has now gone and they’re hired a second writer.

written by

Albert Einstein and Stephen W. Buehler

Don’t put on the title page:

  • WGA registered – If you want the receiver of your script to view you as a professional, they assume that you have already  registered your script – that’s what professionals do.  Amateurs put WGA#.
  • The © symbol.  Same as above.  It’s not necessary.
  • “All Rights Reserved”.  Same as above.  It’s not necessary.
  • Any image, design or cute figure.   Keep it clean and simple.

If you place those items on the title page, you’re saying, “If you steal my idea, I’m going to sue you.”  Wow.  That’s not a good way to start a relationship.  They know the score and they hope you do too.

You want them to read all the pages of your script.  Don’t make them stop at the TITLE PAGE.