CUT OFF YOUR FIRST 20 PAGES NOW!

THAT’S RIGHT,  YOU HEARD ME.

Try this: As an experiment, copy your script into a new document but cut off the first 5 or 10 or 20 pages.  Read your new 30 pages.  Does it start with your hero in action?  Is your script zipping along?  Were those first 20 pages mainly backstory?  Don’t worry, you can place any missing vital information later.  Don’t start explaining who this person is.  Set him in action then slowly reveal him.

Examples:

FIRST TWO PAGES.  Man wakes up.  Man kisses his wife.  Man drives to work.  Man goes into an office building.  Man goes up elevator.  Man on rooftop takes out a rifle.  Man starts shooting.

OR.

FIRST PAGE:  Man opens a rooftop door.  Man goes to the ledge.  Man takes out a rifle.  Man starts shooting.

Which grips you?  Which one will keep the reader/producer/agent, who only read the first 20 pages, going?

It always goes back to: SHOW DON’T TELL.

Advertisements

2 Responses to CUT OFF YOUR FIRST 20 PAGES NOW!

  1. Good advice as always.

    Switching subjects, we’ll be sending you the second draft in about two to three weeks for your review.

    Victor G.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: